The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.

The horizontal reveals that informantion of representation the results of sirvey condicted by a personnel department at a major company.It is two divide agedgroup 18-30 and 45-60.

It is crystal clear that, team spirit was same about in the work performance.second,the chance for personal development and relaxed worked environment was upsurge the18- 30 aged group. Afterthat, survey conducted 45-60 was higher competent the boss and 18-30 was little bit fall down to 45-60 aged group.

On the flip side, there was more job security increased 18-30 aged group. Hence, but they have respect from colleagues to 45-60.Moreover, they have job satisfaction was equal to 18-60 aged group rathan than money was climb to youngerster aged.

To sum up, they have team spirit equal aged and work evironment are same 18-60 aged.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...personnel department at a major company.It is two divide agedgroup 18-30 and 45-60...
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...ame about in the work performance.second,the chance for personal development and rel...
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...higher competent the boss and 18-30 was little bit fall down to 45-60 aged group. On th...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
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...y have respect from colleagues to 45-60.Moreover, they have job satisfaction was equal t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, moreover, second, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 15.0 33.7804878049 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 695.0 965.302439024 72% => OK
No of words: 131.0 196.424390244 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30534351145 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.38312328216 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10873586538 2.65546596893 117% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.687022900763 0.547539520022 125% => OK
syllable_count: 198.0 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0801754901 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.833333333 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.23603664747 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367303479528 0.215688989381 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188638326202 0.103423049105 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589136596152 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213701633636 0.15604864568 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063731545107 0.0819641961636 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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