The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017.

The bar chart represents number of people who attended hospital emergency care departments in northern Ireland in December month of years 2016 and 2017. The calibration of data is based on age group and it is presented in percentages.

Overall, the maximum proportion of presence of people in hospital is of age group 75 and above that reached approximately 70 per 1000 population in 2017 December. However, 2106 also reached similar amount with a slight difference.

To begin, people of age under 5 are started by 50 attendees per 1000 population in 2016 December and i got varied with certain age grouped people as a result it got declined to 20 attendees per 1000 population. Finally, the count of attendance rose to nearly 62 visits per 1000 population with moderate fluctuations for final age range.

On the other hand, population who took part at A&E hospital of 2017 December got some incline when compared to previous year. It began with around 53 members per 1000 population for people under 5. Furthermore, it also faced a drastic decline to 22 number per 1000 population by the next age group. Nevertheless, it arrived the peak factor of just about 69 persons per 1000 population of the last peer batch of December 2017.

To sum up, the factor range between two years of December got a little variation in occurrence of patients in emergency care department. In addition to, it is clear that from initial to final group of citizens had percentages alike rather than other groups in among them.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, in addition, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 3.97073170732 428% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1260.0 965.302439024 131% => OK
No of words: 257.0 196.424390244 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90272373541 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7605187185 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 106.607317073 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568093385214 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 381.6 283.868780488 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1936077555 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 5.23603664747 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313265144077 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116649156958 0.103423049105 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110367548995 0.0843802449381 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193647225369 0.15604864568 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13217245048 0.0819641961636 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 40.7170731707 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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