The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

Submitted by Gia Thanh on Wed, 09/07/2022 - 14:42

The line graphs indicate the proportion of families owning an electrical appliance, and the relative of time they spent on housework in one nation from 1920 to 2019

Looking for an overall perspective, it can be seen that there was an upward trend in the percentage of home, while the number of hours they did chores declined dramatically over the time surveyed.

Vacuum cleaner and washing machine started with the highest proportion, at about 30% and 40%, respectively. The former saw significant growth to 100% in 2000 and remained flat in the last 19 years. Similarly, a considerable increase to 70% in 1960 was recorded for the latter. However, it went down slightly to just above 60% in 1980, before rising by 10% during 39 years. In contrast, refrigerators accounted for less proportion than the other two, no more than 10% at the beginning of the period but this proportion witnessed the sharpest rise to 100% in 1980 and reached a plateau over 39 years.

Regarding the second graph, in 1920, each family did housework 50 hours per week, but this number gradually fell to 15 hours per week after 60 years and finished at 10 hours in 2019.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, regarding, second, similarly, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 959.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 199.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81909547739 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65185739963 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 106.607317073 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668341708543 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.4119562405 43.030603864 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.0 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 22.9334400587 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0780822628978 0.215688989381 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246472457127 0.103423049105 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433475401607 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648829639129 0.15604864568 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740831299259 0.0819641961636 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, regarding, second, similarly, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 959.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 199.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81909547739 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65185739963 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 106.607317073 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668341708543 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.4119562405 43.030603864 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.0 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 22.9334400587 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0780822628978 0.215688989381 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246472457127 0.103423049105 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433475401607 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648829639129 0.15604864568 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740831299259 0.0819641961636 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.