The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the distribution of 3 different industries in the workforce of town A and B in two separate years: 1960 and 2010.
Overall, employees in town A mainly worked in the manufacturing sector while sales attracted the highest percentage in town B’s workforce.
In 1960, the sales sector in town B was far higher than town A, with 70% and 41% respectively. Conversely, the percentage of employees working in manufacturing in town A had nearly tripled the amount of town B, with 29% and 10% being recorded. Meanwhile, the services sector of town A stood at 30% and the figure of town B was 20%.
After 50 years, the manufacturing sector in town A has shown a significant rise of 64% whereas workers in town B started to become popular and resulted 25% under manufacturing industry. However, both town A and B have fallen from a popularity of sales sector, left with only 20% and 53% accordingly. Moreover, employees started to leave the services sector since 1960, the figure of town A halved to 16% remaining. In 2010, town B has levelled off with slightly acceleration of 22% recorded.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
... and 10% being recorded. Meanwhile, the services sector of town A stood at 30% and the f...
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Line 4, column 341, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
...oreover, employees started to leave the services sector since 1960, the figure of town A...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, conversely, however, if, moreover, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 921.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.796875 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99434779319 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536458333333 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5363993698 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.23603664747 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244283985552 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118841607878 0.103423049105 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525892404292 0.0843802449381 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17982544441 0.15604864568 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330447991386 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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