The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

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The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

As we can see from the picture, the protocol in which leather merchandises are made is pretty complicating. In order to finalise the shoes or handbag, the raw material must be processed in approximately 10 steps.
After being taken off from animal skin, the fur is hung up for drying. Next, it is transported to factories for further operation. The raw material is being procedured through 5 steps here in order to become components for tailoring. First, the fur is washed in a liquid which is consist of water and lime. Next, it is soaked with lime liquid before being flattened with mechanic facilities. Subsequently, the flattened product is soaked once again, yet this time the liquid is tannin which is made of water and vegetable matter. In the last step, it is polished thoroughly into fine and delicate leather. Following the refining process in the factories, the leather is shipped to tailoring workshops to finalize. From here, the leather goods such as shoes, handbag, ball, etcera are made. From this protocol, it is inevitable that leather products are extreme high-end and costly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 282, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consisted'.
Suggestion: consisted
... the fur is washed in a liquid which is consist of water and lime. Next, it is soaked w...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 7.0 286% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 916.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00546448087 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73506957352 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612021857923 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 282.6 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.0123971344 43.030603864 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.3333333333 112.824112599 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 22.9334400587 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.23603664747 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0451740722845 0.215688989381 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0182029678865 0.103423049105 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236551645738 0.0843802449381 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0333912440253 0.15604864568 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0108755177884 0.0819641961636 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.2329268293 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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