The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The process reveals information about the various steps of salmon's life cycle.

Overall, the process has mainly three stages, starting with salmon eggs are laid in the upper river, and finishing with the adult salmon swim back to the same place. The whole process takes 10 years to complete.

To begin with, under the upper river, which moves slowly, some salmon eggs are laid between the reed and small stones. It takes 5-6 months to hatch the eggs. After that, a baby salmon, called fry (3-5 cm) swim to fast moving lower river and stayed at there for next 4 years until they grow to smolt, which has a length of 12-15 cm.

Moving further, a smolts swim to open sea where they spend approximately 5 years to become a adult salmon, having a length of 70-75 cm. Finally, the adult salmon swim back to upper river to lay eggs, and the life cycle starts again.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...der the upper river, which moves slowly, some salmon eggs are laid between the re...
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...r that, a baby salmon, called fry 3-5 cm swim to fast moving lower river and stay...
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...here for next 4 years until they grow to smolt, which has a length of 12-15 cm. ...
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...oving further, a smolts swim to open sea where they spend approximately 5 years t...
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... eggs, and the life cycle starts again.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, so, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 710.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55128205128 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 1.96914896999 2.65546596893 74% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621794871795 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 198.9 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7853272459 43.030603864 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.75 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.23603664747 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119013827204 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545317713208 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433879926553 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0854617890444 0.15604864568 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316824857747 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.2329268293 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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