the diagram below shows the process of milk production

These pictures illustrate how milk is produced, and how bottles are delivered. There are several stages in the diagram, from grazing of cows to selling milk in shops.
The first step is that milk is collected by milking machines twice a day, and then sent to refrigeration storage. After that milk is installed on milk tanker for delivering to dairy. Some parts of milk are used to make cheese, cream and butter at the same time as the rest parts are pasteurised and packaged. At the final stage, packaged milk is sent to supermarkets and shops for people. The dairy is where industrial and manufacturing techniques are required to create finished milk. After this step, finished milk will be delivered in two ways. It can be processed one more time to produce cheese, cream and butter.
Otherwise, processed milk from the Dairy will be automatically pasteurised and packaged in an assembly line. This stage is followed by the delivery of packaged milk to supermarkets and shops where customers normally purchase their milk.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 857.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98255813953 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73067104557 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581395348837 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.2342896528 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.9090909091 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6363636364 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.81818181818 5.23603664747 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240469454976 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987048275887 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366154514658 0.0843802449381 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16709229998 0.15604864568 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120680479396 0.0819641961636 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.2329268293 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.