The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagram below demonstrates the process in which the electricity is manufactured by using water.
The general view of the process gives main informations. The process includes 03 basic steps, starting with evaporating water of the sea’s surface and ending with providing consumers with electricity from transformer stations, with complicated and modern machines.
The first step is electricity production from water. Firstly, the water molecules in the surface of seas were evaporated by effecting of thermal radiation from sun. Secondly, molecules rising which are condensed make a droplet and gradually, the droplets gather together to form clouds in the sky. The reservior built with dam keeps water from the rains made from these leaden clouds. When the valve open, the water flows into the turbine through water pipe. At that time, the power of water currents which revolves the wheel of turbine to start the electric generator, is transformed into electricity. After that, the made electricity is converted to high voltage to keep away from waste when it is transmitted. The end, the water comes back reservior because of the action of the pump.
The seconds step is the transmission and change of current of high potential. Firstly the electricity made by electric generator is transmitted into the big and modern grid by high voltage cables. This is the current of high potential which is not the type of electricity for everyday use we have been hoping for. Therefore, before it can be use, we need not only one transformer station but also a system including stations to step down the voltage.
The last step is electricity distribution. The electricity is given from the last transformer station to consumers by underground cables in these places, examples: factories, houses, hospitals, schools.... People use it for labour, daily activities, teaching and learning,... I think all most actions of people, especially in modern life, need electricity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'diagrams'.
Suggestion: diagrams
The given diagram below demonstrates the process in which...
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Line 2, column 58, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...of the process gives main informations. The process includes 03 basic steps, starti...
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Line 3, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...with complicated and modern machines. The first step is electricity production fr...
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Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... daily activities, teaching and learning,... I think all most actions of people, e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 965.302439024 173% => OK
No of words: 314.0 196.424390244 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32484076433 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89483263524 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 106.607317073 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557324840764 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 283.868780488 181% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 15.0 4.33902439024 346% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 8.94146341463 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2381771859 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.09268292683 415% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128255072541 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453191808452 0.103423049105 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052591601899 0.0843802449381 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936273244036 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739971235668 0.0819641961636 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 40.7170731707 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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