The diagram illustrates the manufacturing of dairy products such as milk, cheese and butter for sales.
Overall, there are 8 steps in this process, which starts with cows gazing and ends when the sale of dairy products in supermarkets. It is worth to note that there are only 3 main steps, which are gazing, processing and selling.
The first stage takes place when cows are being grazed, then the cows are milked by milking machines twice a day. What people do in the next step is the milk is put into refrigeration storages on a daily basis before being put into milk tankers, which aims for delivering to the dairy.
The next step is pasteurization, where the milk is pasteurized. Subsequently, the milk is turned into cheese, cream and butter. The final step is packaging and delivering, where dairy products is packaged and sent out to supermarkets and shops for selling.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 33.7804878049 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 737.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88079470199 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72736748489 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615894039735 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8701564803 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.125 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.23603664747 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247944754117 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109854192973 0.103423049105 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634910646842 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162766418593 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574334830338 0.0819641961636 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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