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The diagram shows the stages of processing cocoa beans

The diagram describes how cocoa beans are processed. There are three main stages in the process of producing cocoa productions, beginning with collect cocoa beans and ending with create products to sell. The first step in the process is collecting cocoa beans and then the shell will be removed before all beans will be dry.  Subsequently, If the dried cocoa beans undergo further pressing will make cocoa cake prepared for grinding step. After grinding, Cocoa powder and cocoa liquor will be made. Cocoa liquor will be used in Industry for making cakes and drinks and cocoa powder will be delivery to the consumer.  On the other hand, if you want to make chocolate products, you need to refine the dried cocoa beans and combine them with sugar. After that, the mixed content will be processed one more time to finished to create chocolate products. Finally, the chocolate products will delivery to stores and supermarkets for selling purposes. <div> </div>

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 2515, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'finished creating'.
Suggestion: finished creating
...tent will be processed one more time to finished to create chocolate products. Finally, the chocol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, then, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2626.0 965.302439024 272% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 266.0 196.424390244 135% => OK
Chars per words: 9.87218045113 4.92477711251 200% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 10.6604908588 2.65546596893 401% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.413533834586 0.547539520022 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 283.868780488 224% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.4 1.45097560976 165% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 22.4926829268 196% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 619.714114196 43.030603864 1440% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 437.666666667 112.824112599 388% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 44.3333333333 22.9334400587 193% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.23603664747 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.095880184885 0.215688989381 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615734457635 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507766044077 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095880184885 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 47.2 13.2329268293 357% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -40.86 61.2550243902 -67% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 21.2 6.51609756098 325% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.9 10.3012195122 290% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 40.85 11.4140731707 358% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 40.7170731707 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 83.0 11.4329268293 726% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.6 10.9970731707 178% => OK
text_standard: 30.0 11.0658536585 271% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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