The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releva

The first flow diagram illustrates the information about the production of cement, and second diagram reveals about the concrete production by using equipment and materials. It is a clear and coherent representation.

It can be seen that, the first diagram shows the cement production. In this process, two types of materials are firstly crushed: limestone and clay. After that, materials have turned into the powder form with the help of crusher. Nextly, the powder is put into the mixer and then it has reached in the rotating heater from where the powder become heated and then, the last step is to grind the powder so as to form the cement with the aid of the grinder. once this process has been finished, the cement is packed into the bags.

The second diagram highlights the processes of concrete production. Firstly the mixer of four distinct materials are used: cement, water, sand and gravel and then these materials are put into the big concrete mixer. After that, it started rotating clock-wise in order to form the concrete for building purposes. Here, this process of producing concrete has been finished.

Overall, it is evident that, cement production go through various steps and it requires advanced machinery to form the cement whereas, the process of concrete production is very simple because it never used the high level machinery for its production.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...n, the last step is to grind the powder so as to form the cement with the aid of the gri...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Once
...the cement with the aid of the grinder. once this process has been finished, the cem...
^^^^
Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "requires advanced" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'advancing' or 'to be advanced'.
Suggestion: advancing; to be advanced
...o through various steps and it requires advanced machinery to form the cement whereas, t...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, second, so, then, whereas, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1154.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 227.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08370044053 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55061894619 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511013215859 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 344.7 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.1393205455 43.030603864 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1666666667 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.23603664747 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244046205264 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905886074467 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06069090205 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157720046025 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322554790276 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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