The first pie chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household.The second pie chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The first pie chart illustrates the amount of energy consumed by various activities in an average Australian household whereas the second pie chart represents the greenhouse gas emissions resulting from those consumption.
Overall, it can be seen that heating consumed the highest percentage of energy whereas the highest proportion of green house gas produced by water heating in Australia.
An average Australian household consumed the highest amount of energy for heating while the lowest percentage of energy accounted for cooling.The figures are 42% and 2 % respectively.Less than a third of total energy used for water heating.Refrigeration and heating consumed energy 7% and 2% accordingly.Other appliances used 15% energy which is doubled than that of energy need for lighting in an average Australian households.
According to the second pie chart, water heating produced almost a third of the total greenhouse gas emissions.However,other appliances emitted just over a quarter, two times higher than the amount used for refrigeration. A small amount of greenhouse gas emissions by cooling and lighting.Another 15% of greenhouse gas emissions by heating.
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Comments
1st attempt
1st attempt
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this consumption' or 'those consumptions'?
Suggestion: this consumption; those consumptions
...greenhouse gas emissions resulting from those consumption. Overall, it can be seen that heatin...
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Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...rcentage of energy accounts for cooling.The figures are 42% and 2 % respectively.Le...
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Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Less
...he figures are 42% and 2 % respectively.Less than a third of total energy uses for w...
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Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Refrigeration
... of total energy uses for water heating.Refrigeration and heating consume energy 7% and 2% ac...
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Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Other
...ng consume energy 7% and 2% accordingly.Other appliances use 15% energy which is doub...
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Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'household'?
Suggestion: household
...d for lighting in an average Australian households. According to the second pie chart, ...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...d of the total greenhouse gas emissions.However,other appliances emission just over a q...
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Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , other
...e total greenhouse gas emissions.However,other appliances emission just over a quarter...
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'appliances'' or 'appliance's'?
Suggestion: appliances'; appliance's
... greenhouse gas emissions.However,other appliances emission just over a quarter, two times...
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Line 7, column 291, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Another
...e gas emissions by cooling and lighting.Another 15% of greenhouse gas emissions by heat...
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Line 7, column 343, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of greenhouse gas emissions by heating.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, second, third, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 995.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 174.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7183908046 4.92477711251 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.63738412397 2.65546596893 137% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 303.3 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.4926829268 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.083812382 43.030603864 242% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 199.0 112.824112599 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.8 22.9334400587 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6 5.23603664747 222% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428282174024 0.215688989381 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.23478997304 0.103423049105 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152973016663 0.0843802449381 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265293119296 0.15604864568 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161570236203 0.0819641961636 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.9 13.2329268293 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 61.2550243902 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.3012195122 172% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.49 11.4140731707 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.9970731707 142% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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