the following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European ADULTS in 1985 and 1995 .

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the following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European ADULTS in 1985 and 1995 .

A glance at the two pie charts provided the rate of pastime in european between adults through in 10 years.

As you can see european adults perefer to spend most percentage of free time on watching tv in comperation other activite.However,eating out and talking with family slip dramaticly.Although cooking is timeconsuming but people belive that it is so healthier than eat their meal in the restorants or out.

Whatching tv is the most papular leisure but approximatly are the same in though the years.Playing computer games had the bigest portion in 1995 with 27% .it is clear people in douring the time prefer playing computer games in stead of eating out and talking with family.

it is cristal clear that the rate of talking with family and eating out slip respectedly from 18% and 23% to 7% and 8% as well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...and talking with family slip dramaticly.Although cooking is timeconsuming but people bel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 688.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 141.0 196.424390244 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87943262411 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.44591672665 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17382027755 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63829787234 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 197.1 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.4926829268 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.7478133832 43.030603864 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.0 112.824112599 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.25 22.9334400587 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0995761401677 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692831289584 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747763262152 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692831289584 0.15604864568 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747763262152 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.2329268293 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.9970731707 145% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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