the global sales of 5 mobile phone brands

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the global sales of 5 mobile phone brands

The bar chart compares the figures for 5 different phone brands in terms of sales around the world during a period 4 years.
It is clear that from the chart the global sales of Nokia and Samsung were the highest over the research period. Additionally, while the figure of Samsung increase dramatically, the sales of Nokia considerable decreased as we can see.
In 2009, the sales of Nokia phone were highest, at around 450 million units, while the figure for Samsung was significantly lower, over 220 million devices. In 2011, whereas the number of Nokia phones were sold in worldwide market slightly fell, there was a remarkable rise in the sales of Samsung by 100 million units. Over the next two years, Nokia saw a continuous decline in the quantity of its sold phones to the same as figure of Samsung in the previous two years. By contrast, the sales of Samsung phone enormously went up to approximately 460 million mobile phones, which made Samsung become the market leader.
Turning to other three brands, Apple phone became more popular than LG and ZTE. In 2013, there was a considerable rise in its sales to nearly 150 million devices, while LG witnessed a gradual decrease in its sales to about 80 units. Finally, as we can see that the number of ZTE phones were bought by customers around the world climbed up steadily to 60 million devices in the same year.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'were the highest'.
Suggestion: were the highest
...t the global sales of Nokia and Samsung were highest over the research period. Additionally,...
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Line 4, column 150, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('enormously') instead an adjective, or a noun ('fall') instead of another adjective.
...sales. While Nokia constantly witnessed an enormously fall to roughly 250 million units, the sales...
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Line 4, column 277, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gradually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decrease') instead of another adjective.
...to 160 million units. Meanwhile, LG saw a gradually decrease in the sales of mobile phones, the figu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 993.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82038834951 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55157471168 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533980582524 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.2183008478 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.2727272727 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.23603664747 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218290706724 0.215688989381 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868030247395 0.103423049105 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621863509412 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145461387624 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464271990084 0.0819641961636 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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