The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows information about the average temperature per month while the table illustrates the average sunny time in a year in 3 big cities: New York, London and Sydney.

Overall, there was a similar trend in changing of temperature in New York and London. Whereas, Sydney has an opposite trend to the others.

The average temperature of New York and London increased gradually to hit a peak at around 29oC and 23oC respectively in July. Then it started to go down till the end of the year. In contrast, Sydney had the hottest period in January, which is over 25oC then slipped to approximately 15o C in the middle of July and then continued to rise steadily during the resta of the year.

It is clear from the table that London has the shortest time of sunshine, which was only 1180 hours while New York and Sydney had much longer time of about 2535 hours and 2473 hours, which were more than double of that in comparison with London.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... of temperature in New York and London. Whereas, Sydney has an opposite trend to the ot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, then, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 783.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57894736842 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41914493872 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 240.3 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.834205992 43.030603864 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.857142857 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4285714286 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171601447207 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770037999143 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095932670503 0.0843802449381 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115970393179 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110163509286 0.0819641961636 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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