The line graph illustrates the figure for visitors to two music websites over fifteen period.
As is highlighted in the graph, pop parade was generally higher than music choice.
It can be seen from the graph,while the statistics of the pop parade shows the starting point of 120000 visitors on the first day, music choice 'visit was only at 40000. However, the number of pop parade went down steeply in the next 5 days and dropped to the lowest point at 30000 on the day seventh before reaching a peak at about 170000 on the last day of period.
On the other hand, over the next ten days , the quantity of music choice fluctuated in the range of the 20000 and 60000 before exceeding the number of pop parade for the first time at about 13000 on the day twelfth.Finally, it saw a steeply go down on the last two days.
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: Dilbar
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'period' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'periods'.
Suggestion: periods
...tors to two music websites over fifteen period. As is highlighted in the graph, pop p...
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Line 3, column 30, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...c choice. It can be seen from the graph,while the statistics of the pop parade shows ...
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Line 4, column 42, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n the other hand, over the next ten days , the quantity of music choice fluctuated...
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Line 4, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of the 20000 and 60000 before exceeding the number of pop parade for the first t...
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Line 4, column 216, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Finally
... time at about 13000 on the day twelfth.Finally, it saw a steeply go down on the last t...
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Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('steeply') instead an adjective, or a noun ('go') instead of another adjective.
...3000 on the day twelfth.Finally, it saw a steeply go down on the last two days.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 668.0 965.302439024 69% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4238410596 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37145273802 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549668874172 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 194.4 283.868780488 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.618962934 43.030603864 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.6 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2 22.9334400587 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 5.23603664747 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155286412305 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100463842589 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427849673389 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111692675604 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300069981869 0.0819641961636 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.41 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.95 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 19.0 40.7170731707 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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