The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

This bar graph demonstrates the unemployed women percentages in each country of the UK in two consecutive years (2013 and 2014).

Overall, it is evident that the female unemployment rate decreased in the countries of the UK except in Scotland. Also, the bar chart shows that England had the largest fraction of jobless females in 2013.Notwithstanding, in 2014 the greatest rate was reported in Scotland.

In England, the unemployed women percentage had a 0.3%-slight decline during this two-year course to reach 6.5% by 2014.Thereby, it became the second most UK country with jobless females after it was the first in 2013.In the meantime, in Scotland, the other UK country where more than 6% of the women were unemployed, the jobless female rate raised from 6.1% to 6.7%.

Meanwhile, the most considerable decrease was in Northern Ireland, where the female unemployment rate had experienced precisely a one-percent drop to be the lowest country in the UK that had unemployed women at 4.6%. Simultaneously, Wales, where unemployed women made up 5.4% of the whole welsh women in 2013, had witnessed a decrease at 0.4% in the following year.

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 963.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17741935484 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12728122309 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55376344086 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.2702472209 43.030603864 200% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.5 112.824112599 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 22.9334400587 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327378830703 0.215688989381 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191565224767 0.103423049105 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668539927505 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232757314088 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633715375372 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.2329268293 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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