The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Diyora on Tue, 12/17/2019 - 06:55

The graph gives information about the number of male and female students studying it at university from 1985-2015 and it is given with numbers.

The graph illustrating that number of male students only raised in this time period. It was 5000 students in 1985 and then in 1995 indicator increased to 13000. During the 10 years this indicator increased slowly and it was 27000 students. After that in 2015 it became 40000 male students who were studying at university.

So, I can't say that number of female students only raised between 30 years. Because in 1985 it was 2000 and in 1995 it raised to 3500. Then until 2010 this indicator increased and became 32000. After that during 5 years the number of female students decreased, also it was 29000 in 2015.

In conclusion, I tend to think that in the future the number of female students will rise too.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eased slowly and it was 27000 students. After that in 2015 it became 40000 male stude...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...were studying at university. So, I cant say that number of female students only...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, then, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 5.60731707317 321% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 720.0 965.302439024 75% => OK
No of words: 150.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41061541243 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506666666667 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 197.1 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.8492888292 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.0 112.824112599 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304749340238 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127228215014 0.103423049105 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121319492165 0.0843802449381 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220492481645 0.15604864568 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130497031706 0.0819641961636 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 61.2550243902 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.49 8.06136585366 81% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 11.0658536585 54% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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