I come from a big family of four children.My nuclear family is 6 man.I really enjoy my family life.I was born at Lahijan,However I grew up on the Tehran by 16 years old.After that we migrated again to Lahijan.As I said we are 4 child and you sure know that raising 4 person is so hardship.I have one brother named Saeed that he is elder brother me and Parisa is my elder sister,of course I m older than her 2 years,Therefor according to the above talk I m the second child.My littlesister named simin that there is a gap age about seven years between actully my sister and I.My parents really tried to give me a good upbringing.my father is really a familly man,we learned from him that we should try in the life,Because of this my brother and I am independet almost.At the beginning in our life because of my father was callegian,my mom supported our family,But now my dad the main breadwinner now.Mom took retirement.She was teacher.I think Motherhood really suits her,Because she is got some motherly concern and duties.Fortunately we do get on very well with togheter.Anyone 4 person don t get married,therefor don t have extented family.
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: Khshbhman
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, second, so, well, i think, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 5.60731707317 785% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 942.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68656716418 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23326439739 2.65546596893 122% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 106.607317073 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.676616915423 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 1.53170731707 783% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 8.94146341463 11% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 201.0 22.4926829268 894% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 43.030603864 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 942.0 112.824112599 835% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 201.0 22.9334400587 876% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 62.0 5.23603664747 1184% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 1.69756097561 1532% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0186092689195 0.215688989381 9% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0186092689195 0.103423049105 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0186092689195 0.15604864568 12% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 101.2 13.2329268293 765% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -124.08 61.2550243902 -203% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 80.5 10.3012195122 781% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.4 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 17.06 8.06136585366 212% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 11.4329268293 481% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 82.4 10.9970731707 749% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 55.0 11.0658536585 497% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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