The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concert between 2010 and 2015

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The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concert between 2010 and 2015.

The given line graph compares the proportion of music concerts attendees in a particular city according to age categories over a 5-year-period, 2010 to 2015.

Overall, the rate of attendance of music concerts of most of the age groups showed an upward trend over half a decade with the youngest age groups accounted for the largest percentage. Also, the older the age group, the lesser the proportion of people in that age group attend concerts.

Starting at 40% of music concert attendees, the youngest age group experienced a dramatic rise to about 55% in 2011, surpassed the age group of 25 - 44 (40%), and it then gradually rose and eventually peaked at 70% in 2015. There was a sharp fall in the music concert attendance rate in the second age group (25 - 44) to 40% which subsequently recovers back to 50% in 2012. It then went up mildly to nearly 52% and then levelled off until 2015. The proportion of people in the third age group fell by 10% in the first two years and recovered by nearly 20% 3 years later. The rate of music attendees in the fourth age category rose slightly to nearly 30% in 2011, subsequently remained unchanged in 2 years and dropped by approximately 10% 2 years later. The percentage of people who attend concert in the oldest age group fluctuated over the given period of time and finally reached the top of slightly more than 50% in 2015.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 751, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ped by approximately 10% 2 years later. The percentage of people who attend concert...
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Line 5, column 845, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...est age group fluctuated over the given period of time and finally reached the top of slightly...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, second, so, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1129.0 965.302439024 117% => OK
No of words: 244.0 196.424390244 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62704918033 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6293398133 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 331.2 283.868780488 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.6385264148 43.030603864 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.444444444 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1111111111 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385852907526 0.215688989381 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169284917096 0.103423049105 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842839628686 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274565491749 0.15604864568 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214118095899 0.0819641961636 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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