The graph shows the number of cases of X disease in Someland between the years 1960 and 1995.

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The graph shows the number of cases of X disease in Someland between the years 1960 and 1995.

The line graph includes many changes about the number of Someland’s people suffering from X disease over a period of 35 years from 1960 to 1995.

Overall, it is clear that the number of effected people rose dramatically until the mid seventies and experienced a fivefold increase, remained stable for 5 years, before dropping to zero in the late 80s. After this time until the end of given period any case was not reported in this area.

At the beginning of the period, only 100 people contracted x disease. this figure remained constant for 5 years at the same level. X outbreak had been raging for a decade, with the number infected people rising and reaching a peak of 500 cases in 1970.

this circumstance was stable until 1975. Suddenly, a fortunate event occurred, with the number of people effected by X disease dropping markedly to zero in 1990. In the 5 last year, X disease appeared from this area.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...efore dropping to zero in the late 80s. After this time until the end of given period...
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Line 9, column 71, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
..., only 100 people contracted x disease. this figure remained constant for 5 years at...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ching a peak of 500 cases in 1970. this circumstance was stable until 1975....
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... peak of 500 cases in 1970. this circumstance was stable until 1975. Sud...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 778.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8625 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59806869376 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0661291089 43.030603864 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4444444444 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.222222222222 5.23603664747 4% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232125435642 0.215688989381 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864896614174 0.103423049105 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933395595591 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148694896774 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10375553735 0.0819641961636 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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