IELTS wrting task 1 test 1 cambridge ielts 8

The tabel on the passage represent causes of land degradation by region. Over-cultivation in North America often causes land degradation for 3.3 %. While in Europe, defurestation takes many part of causing land degradation for 9.8%. The total number of land degradation in North America is 5%. In the other hand, total land degradation in Europe is the biggest among two other countries by 23%. There is no over-cultivation in Oceania. The main cause of land degradation in oceania is over-grazing for 11.3%. Therefore, deforestation just causs 1.7% of land degradation in that country. Total of land degradation in Oceania is bigger than North. America for 13%. It is proved that Oceania causes global warming more than North America.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun part seems to be countable; consider using: 'many parts'.
Suggestion: many parts
...%. While in Europe, defurestation takes many part of causing land degradation for 9.8%. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 617.0 965.302439024 64% => OK
No of words: 118.0 196.424390244 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22881355932 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.29587325169 3.73543355544 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12207210484 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 64.0 106.607317073 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 192.6 283.868780488 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 22.4926829268 44% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.4240924087 43.030603864 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 56.0909090909 112.824112599 50% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.7272727273 22.9334400587 47% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.45454545455 5.23603664747 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 1.13902439024 790% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.2329268293 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.33 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.87 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.9970731707 55% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 150 words wanted.
Minimum two paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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