the images below explains the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisions where relevant

The pictures illustrate the the procedure of the environment and food chain being polluted by acid rain which is caused by polluting substances in contemporary life.
In general, there are totally 10 factors being listed in the figure, which starts from smoke produced by facilities and vehicles in modern days that leads to the contamination of cloud to become acid rain and finally gets into our food.
The process begins with 4 criteria, including: housing, transport, factories and power stations to manufacture pollutants of carbon dioxide, sulphur dioxide, nitrogen oxides, mercury and other compounds that have risen up to clouds and poisoned them across countries and continents, which can be seen in number 5 when clouds absorb pollutants. After laden with pollutants become heavy, it will fall the acid rain down to hills and fields, trees and plants then stream down to rivers or lakes, which enters food chain and deteriorates our eco-systems.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
The pictures illustrate the the procedure of the environment and food c...
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Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
The pictures illustrate the the procedure of the environment and food c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, so, then, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 805.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2614379085 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70985783551 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.692810457516 0.547539520022 127% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.4926829268 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9185102987 43.030603864 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 201.25 112.824112599 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.25 22.9334400587 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.23603664747 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235330518532 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150569165383 0.103423049105 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088862222165 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179326303791 0.15604864568 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794424044063 0.0819641961636 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 13.2329268293 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 61.2550243902 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 10.3012195122 176% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.82 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.78 8.06136585366 134% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.9970731707 156% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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