The line graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A glance at the graph provided reveals similarities between the Chinese and US birth rates during the period from 1920 to 2000. It is evident that both nations saw considerable fluctuations in fertility, with lows during the 1940s and highs during the 1950w. Increasing from approximately 10 percent in 1920 to 15 percent in 1935, China's birth rate then plunged to a low of just 5 percent in the 1940s. This was followed by a period of exponential growth, with fertility in the country reaching a peak of 20 percent in 1950. The late half of the country, however, brought a sustained decline in this figure. The US''s birth rate, meanwhile, fluctuated at somewhere between 11 and 13 percent prior to 1940, before dropping sharply to less than 5 percent in 1945. The following 5 years saw a rapid climb in this rate, to somewhere in the vicinity of 15 percent in 1950 followed by a steady fall

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 761, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...sharply to less than 5 percent in 1945. The following 5 years saw a rapid climb in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 733.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63924050633 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6936830803 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594936708861 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 207.0 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.3800622859 43.030603864 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.714285714 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118709348603 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557298990625 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066471523899 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118709348603 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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