"The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world."
Please kindly find the whole essay topic in the link below (Sorry for this inconvenience because I can't paste screenshot here)
http://zim.vn/bai-mau-band-8-ielts-writing-task-1-de-thi-ngay-17-6-2017/
The line graph compares the number of users of different communication services in the world between 1998 and 2008.
It is clear that cellular phone service significantly increased to become by far the most important means of communication over a period of 10 years. Meanwhile, mobile broadband and fixed broadband consistently contributed the least parts during the period studied.
In 2008, landline service was the most popular means of communication with approximately 14% of inhabitants. Cellular phone and internet services contributed just 4%-5% of total communication. Mobile phone broadband provided a negligible percentage and fixed broadband did not completely appear until 2002. However, just 4 years later, cellular phone service overtook landline service to become the main means of communication used by worldwide inhabitants.
Cellular phone service made a gradual growth over a whole 10-years period to reach the peak of around 65 users per 100 inhabitants by 2008. Almost all other ways of communication also gained more users from 1998 to 2008 but their growth rates were lower than cellular phone service’s. Only landline service slightly declined from 2006 to 2008 and ended up at around 18% by 2008.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1048.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51578947368 4.92477711251 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03042741288 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594736842105 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.944280333 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.8 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113611984392 0.215688989381 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527203042235 0.103423049105 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536082060136 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889209179829 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610264802975 0.0819641961636 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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