Adding a high dose of sugar in processed food and drinking products leads to various health related issues. Many suggest that making these items more expensive we can cut down the amount of sugar consumption. In my opinion, I agree with this view, however, besides this, creating public awareness regarding the negative effects of sugary foods might help to achieve the desired outcome faster.
Firstly, lowering the amount of sugar consumption can be achieved by increasing the price of processed foods and beverages, because people tend to decrease the amount of utilisation of any product, if the price goes high, particularly when it is a non-essential item . In most cases, manufactured foods and drinks are just ready made alternatives to fresh fruits and juices and therefore adding extra cost might encourage people to search for a cheaper food source. For example, in 1998, m&m Company of USA, increased the price of his chocolates, and as a result this company lost a significant amount of market share, while the cheaper alternatives flourished due to the comparability in price. On the other hand, another approach that could be proven practical is to educate the population about the dangerous consequences of sugar rich foods. Such initiatives and campaigns can make people see the bigger picture, which will enable them to comprehend the scenario more vividly. Moreover,If information and knowledge are available, self realisation will start to generate rapidly, and more often than not, self awareness drives people more effectively than any other calculative strategy. To illustrate, during the Corona pandemic, at the beginning, people were more reluctant to get vaccinated, but when the public were made aware of the fact that vaccines were assisting to decrease the mortality rate, the numbers of vaccinated people climbed higher dramatically.
To sum up, there could be many viable options for cutting sugar intake. However, I think making the sugar rich product a pricey option, and having people realise the health hazards of high sugar intake, could be the most effective and fruitful attempts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 965.302439024 185% => OK
No of words: 337.0 196.424390244 172% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30860534125 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76686067847 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 106.607317073 194% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614243323442 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 283.868780488 201% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.7443556558 43.030603864 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.083333333 112.824112599 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 5.23603664747 261% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304971411041 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108588859258 0.103423049105 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679444378711 0.0843802449381 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217886780185 0.15604864568 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289151622388 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.2329268293 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 61.2550243902 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.06136585366 123% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 40.7170731707 258% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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