The pie charts provided compare the proportion of online purchases made in retail sector in New Zealand in two different years: 2003 and 2013.
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there were significant changes. Sales for movies and music, which had the third largest share in the first year took the leading position in 2013.
A third of the money spent on the internet purchases was for travelling in 2003. In contrast, a decade later 29% was reported in this sector. The share of online sales for music and movies, however, seem to have raised by a remarkable 12% by 2013 and ranked first with 33% in this year.
Sales for clothes though the internet comprised of 24% if the total e-expenditure in 2003. After 10 years period it amounted to the least percentage of 16%. Taking the least position in 2003 with 19%, sales of books in the internet saw a mere 3% increase in the final year.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, third, as for, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 751.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63580246914 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33347213644 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623456790123 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6402295854 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4444444444 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350858914802 0.215688989381 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122093073192 0.103423049105 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124351372381 0.0843802449381 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209522652524 0.15604864568 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136604223501 0.0819641961636 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.2329268293 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.