The pie charts compare the online shopping sales of Travel, books, cloths and film/music in New Zealand both in 2003 and 2013. Overall, some sales categories have been increased over the two years such as film/ music and books. While other categories surprisingly have had less demand in 2013 like clothes sales.
As it is show in the both pie charts, travel was the most sector that had the most shopping demand during both of the two years, with percentage of 36% in 2003 to a slight dropping to get to 29% in 2013. While the demand of clothes has had dramatic dripping down in the online shopping sales from 24% in 2003 to 16% in 2013.
Moreover, there was an increase in online shopping sales for film/ music by 12% from 21% in 2003 to 33% in 2013. Also the book ratio has raised up to in 22% in 2013 compared to 19% in 2003.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, moreover, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 684.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38461538462 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.15018003008 2.65546596893 81% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 184.5 283.868780488 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1548469645 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7142857143 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22171688171 0.215688989381 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111767173464 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763527411448 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156489988276 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00533149618251 0.0819641961636 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.2329268293 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.98 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.42 11.4140731707 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.