The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.Write a report

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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
Write a report for a university lecturer and report the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare the type of cultural and free-time activities which both boys and girls take part in.
As an overall trend, it is clear that boys prefer computer games and outdoor sports while girls enjoy dancing and reading.
According to the first graph, the largest amount of young man ‘s time goes into computer games, which is 34%. Surprisingly, nearly the same amount, which is 26%, is spend on playing basketball. Moreover, one-fifth and one-tenth the amount of time belongs to soccer and skateboarding, respectively. The reading habit among them is very poor which accounts for only 2% in total. Impressively, listening to music is an activity which makes up equally percentage (10%) of boys and girls.
In terms of girls’ activities, computer games are not the most favorite pursuit of them as boys. As a result, this one account for 16%. The amount of dancing time stands at the first rank, which is 27%, followed by reading, which is one-fifth in total. Regarding outdoor hobbies, gymnastics and netball take about one-tenth the amount of time of girls to play.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, regarding, so, while, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 913.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01648351648 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62357315405 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626373626374 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.7668745881 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.0 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5454545455 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.23603664747 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161127819292 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605853741221 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531886677763 0.0843802449381 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107029011268 0.15604864568 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570442357412 0.0819641961636 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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