The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The two maps, present and future layout, are juxtaposed to show future plan for renovation for sports centre of a university.

Overall, three separate blocks of sports area are merged to form a single block of larger size by adding some additional recreational facilities to presently established one.

At present, central, larger block of the centre consists of various facilities like gym, seating arrangements, 25m length pool,a changing room and a reception at the entrance. Out of these facilities, gym area will witness considerable change due to increase in its area ;however, other facilities lying in middle block will remain unchanged.

Unlike center part of the sports hall, two outdoor courts present at opposite side of main hall is going to experience dramatic reformation. To illustrate, court at eastern side will be replaced by two dance studios at the side, a sports hall in the middle, a changing room at corner and cafe near entrance ;meanwhile, western court will be superseded by changing room at corner just like eastern one, sports shop near the entrance and a large leisure pool.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 127, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
...m, seating arrangements, 25m length pool,a changing room and a reception at the en...
^^
Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... unchanged. Unlike center part of the sports hall, two outdoor courts present at opp...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ced by two dance studios at the side, a sports hall in the middle, a changing room at ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 931.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17222222222 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75813051733 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.3636290014 43.030603864 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.166666667 112.824112599 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 22.9334400587 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12435359213 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657839159962 0.103423049105 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544038576916 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0836903266282 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589809216882 0.0819641961636 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.2329268293 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 61.2550243902 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.4329268293 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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