The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by 111 on Mon, 03/20/2023 - 08:23

The picture given depicts the modernization of a public park from 1920 to today
It is clear from the plans that the most noticeable transformation is the erection of the rose garden in the center of the park. Additionally, a water feature has been built at the location where glasshouse used to be.
In 1920, there was a fountain located in the heart of the park, while a stage for musicians was situated to the left of the fountain. At the same time, the fountain was flanked by an entrace to the north and an entrace to the south. Meanwhile, there were three rose gardens in the northwest, northeast and southwest areas. By contrast, seats and a pond for water plants were situated around the park and in the northeast corner in that order.
Currently, the fountain has been replaced by a rose garden and seats, whereas the entrances and rose garden located in the northwest corner has remained unchanged. In contrast, the amphithetre for concerts has been constructed at the location where the stage for musicians used to be. At the same time, the glasshouse has been demolished to give way to the water feature, while there has been introductions of cafe and children' play area relative to the disappearance of the pond for water plants

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...trast, seats and a pond for water plants were situated around the park and in the...
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Line 4, column 406, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ture, while there has been introductions of cafe and children play area relative ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1028.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73732718894 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71597906698 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456221198157 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 313.2 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9790074492 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.222222222 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.23603664747 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124564694339 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535963622222 0.103423049105 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589098365682 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109416702151 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685781464332 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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