The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The diagrams elucidate the changes that took place in a public park called Grange Park from 1920 to today.
Overall, it is conspicuous that the park was changed to provide some of the facilities such as cafe, parking and play area for the children.
According to the graph, the park was opened in 1920 with various establishments including a fountain in the middle of the park. In addition, there were two entrances, one was attached to Eldon Street and the other was located in front of Arnold Avenue. Glasshouse was on the right of the entrance nearby Eldon Street. Rose garden and pond for water plants were on the opposite side of the glasshouse. The stage where musicians can perform was on the left-hand side of the fountain. The stage was surrounded by seats and a rose garden.
After the renovation, the park has several recreational facilities now. The entrances are the same as the way they used to be. However, the fountain is replaced by the Rose garden, and the availability of seats is increased now. The water feature is in the replacement of the glasshouse and seats which were close to the glasshouse. The rose garden nearby the pond is overtaken by the cafe and in the place of Pond; the play area for children is developed. The most significant change is that the stage and its nearby seats and garden on the bottom side of the stage are removed and a new amphitheater for concerts is developed. However, the rose garden on the left of the Arnold Avenue entrance remained the same. The remarkable new change is that Underground Park is developed and the entrance of it is a nearby water feature.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...us that the park was changed to provide some of the facilities such as cafe, parking and pl...
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Line 4, column 458, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he play area for children is developed. The most significant change is that the sta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 7.0 343% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1335.0 965.302439024 138% => OK
No of words: 285.0 196.424390244 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68421052632 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61728515725 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 106.607317073 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452631578947 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 422.1 283.868780488 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.33902439024 300% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8148943107 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4375 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8125 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3125 5.23603664747 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.09268292683 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183796368895 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656548627602 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0981360854152 0.0843802449381 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159333537596 0.15604864568 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975788499995 0.0819641961636 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 40.7170731707 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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