The plans below show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and 2012 after it was redeveloped Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The plans below show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and 2012 after it was redeveloped.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given maps illustrate the layout of the South Wing of Walton Museum in two different years: 2008 and 2012 after it was modified.
Overall, there are new changes, with the appearance of two more floors and the elevator. It is also noticeable that there were also more services in the entire building.
In the year 2008, the South Wing was quite simple. There was an entrance leading to the reception and reading room. Below these rooms there were the shop and cloaks room which were connected to the level upstairs level with a staircase. The special exhibition room stood next to the shop.
In the year 2012, the South Wing experienced massive changes. The entrance was removed for the new entrance hall. Two more levels were constructed with more facilities. The first new floor had the restaurant and self-service room. There was also the new terrace adjacent to the restaurant. The second new floor was the place where the exhibition room was located. The new elevator was erected, removing the old series of stairs. The special exhibition room plus shop were enlarged, and the reception plus reading room shortened. The former cloaks room was relocated to the reception zone, making way for the children play area. The only component which remained unchanged was the path outside the South Wing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 430, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ted, removing the old series of stairs. The special exhibition room plus shop were ...
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Line 4, column 531, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...reception plus reading room shortened. The former cloaks room was relocated to the...
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Line 4, column 630, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... making way for the children play area. The only component which remained unchanged...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1089.0 965.302439024 113% => OK
No of words: 220.0 196.424390244 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40015064954 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513636363636 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 322.2 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.33902439024 254% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 8.94146341463 190% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.4926829268 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.9340211883 43.030603864 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.0588235294 112.824112599 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.9411764706 22.9334400587 56% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.58823529412 5.23603664747 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.09268292683 342% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171790712249 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644597919033 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775487454348 0.0843802449381 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124472501215 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0985414793228 0.0819641961636 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.54 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.9970731707 62% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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