Please:- a) give up to three practical examples of how you intend to use the knowledge, skills and connections you will gain from your scholarship. Possible tasks can be personal and/or professional; and
b) list any possible constraints you think may prevent you from achieving these tasks.*:
As I said, my job is to conserve and develop biodiversity. I am ambitious and still cherished but not yet able to do it.
I hope I will get an Australian government scholarship and go to study in beautiful Australia. After completing my studies, with the knowledge gained and with the relationships I have, I will continue to do the unfinished and new tasks.
Firstly, I set a goal to complete the build of hoang lien son biosphere Reserve, the most biodiversity area in Vietnam in the three provinces of Lao Cai, Lai Chau and Yen Bai.
At the landscape level approach the project will help the relevant stakeholders to develop a collaborative management system for the hoang lien son Mountain Range within the legal framework of a “Man and biosphere Reserve”.
Second: hoang lien national park has total area of 95,904.97 ha, inside core zone 28,509 ha and buffer zone 67,395.97ha in 6 communes with over 4,500 households, and over 25,000 people and distributed over 39 villages; in which, 05 villages are located within the core zone of the national park, and 14 villages are located adjacent to the national park, most households are poor. I will propose an overall livelihood project to develop the economy, increase farmers' income, and reduce pressure on biodiversity.
Third: Tourism development in association with conservation involves the participation of many farmers in the hoang lien national park area to reduce agricultural farming activities, increase income for farmers to contribute to conservation and development biodiversity.
I know that to accomplish these tasks, I will face many difficulties and obstacles.
- Does the government support it?
- Big budget.
- Where is the human resource?
- how is the participation of colleagues?
- how is the participation of farmers?
- The impact of climate change and epidemics. And so on.
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| 2019-04-25 | Tam Thanh Nguyen | 64 | view |
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- Please a give up to three practical examples of how you intend to use the knowledge skills and connections you will gain from your scholarship Possible tasks can be personal and or professional and b list any possible constraints you think may prevent you 64
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 194, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ain Range within the legal framework of a 'Man and biosphere Reserve'. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, so, still, third, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 6.8 265% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 965.302439024 163% => OK
No of words: 299.0 196.424390244 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26755852843 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18418896937 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 106.607317073 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57525083612 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 283.868780488 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 100.335009777 43.030603864 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 98.4375 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 3.83414634146 313% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.040918734074 0.215688989381 19% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0157383130785 0.103423049105 15% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0193557870707 0.0843802449381 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0188225748687 0.15604864568 12% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215592874168 0.0819641961636 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 40.7170731707 194% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.