Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a bit of doubt, award has a specific place in children raising, which is most decisive factor in
future personality of kids. While some people believe that every single high mark from children
should attain a prize, another think it is not necessary or even harmful to their long-time behavior. In
my view, give prize for each high mark is not appropriate because of two reason.
To begin with, give money for each high score finally can affect children mental health and
motivation, it may have negative affect on child's intrinsic motivation, which determines whether an
action is eternal or provisional. Although, give money as a reward for every high grade establish
behavior that there is not exist from the beginning, in order to continue what is already available
internal motivation is needed. Imagine a child who give money after his every single high mark, and
his parents have to go a mission or travel, or due to some unknown reasons it is not possible to
encourage immediately their children by money or other things as rewards, and then guess what
happen? A child whose efforts for get high scores depends on prizes probably experience a big
decrease in grades and regress, which also lead to feel down, anxiety or other mental problems. We
can see its necessary to teach children to love what they do by their heart without dependency on
external reasoning such as money or any specific prize.
On the other hand, if children can not able to predict when they will achieve a commendation,
probably they will work harder, this is already a discussed fact in psychology literature,
unpredictable or periodic award better than to give it in a regular estate. Because it is not regular
and they don’t know the big prize when is coming in all tasks they try to be their best. For instance
when I was a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on my final exams
but he didn’t say me I have to get how many high scores, on that year he gave me a single prize but
it made feel excited for all my scores and do my best. If the prizes are predictable may be its not
enough exciting to drive me for attain high grades on every task. It is better to give just single award
and employ a child mind with success every single moment.
Finally, I assume not only give money for every high score is not required, it is threat children mental
health as well, and regular prize because its nature predictably couldn’t provide enough excitement
that is keep child's mind with do his best every single moment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 34, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...h and motivation, it may have negative affect on childs intrinsic motivation, which dete...
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Line 8, column 28, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...e establish behavior that there is not exist from the beginning, in order to continu...
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Line 20, column 39, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[2]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
... when I was a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on ...
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Line 20, column 50, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...s a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on my final exam...
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Line 21, column 15, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[1]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'tell'?
Suggestion: tell
... based on my final exams but he didn’t say me I have to get how many high scores, ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.0 271% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 6.8 265% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 5.60731707317 803% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 965.302439024 221% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 453.0 196.424390244 231% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7174392936 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 3.73543355544 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4415809399 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 106.607317073 216% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507726269316 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 283.868780488 237% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.482926829268 1449% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0470225194 43.030603864 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.642857143 112.824112599 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3571428571 22.9334400587 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.23603664747 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 3.83414634146 704% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248261211851 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907359460665 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04261883268 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664507091461 0.15604864568 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447768183431 0.0819641961636 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.2329268293 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 61.2550243902 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 40.7170731707 216% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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