It is believed that competitive sports,either team or individual have negative effects at school. In my opinion I disagree with this statement,because goals of education are to prepare competitive people for the society. Moreover, competitive sports help learners to be motivated and encouraged not to give up in extreme situations in real-life.
In the school curriculum,competitive sports should be included. If it is team sport,it helps learners to collaborate with each other,be responsible as a member of the team. Such skills are very important in preparing learners for the future. Take for example,football or basketball,students need to decide each step they do while playing and try to win together.The same skill could have a great benefit when they become workers. If it’s an individual sport, it could help a learner to make a decision by himself how to be a unique and show his talents much better among other participants in order to win. As a result, competitive sports lead to improve important real – life skills as collaboration,leadership, making a decision and being responsible which aren’t taught in other subjects.
The second reason of including it into school curriculum is a motivation.Evidently,at school teachers are to motivate learners to do well,however, we should teach learners to motivate by themselves from early ages. Therefore,competitive sports play a great role in order to motivate learners intrinsically.Take for example an individual sport swimming,a learner has to be disciplined and do his trainings regularly.Furthermore, he is taught to analyze his behavior during swimming,to organize and have plan” B” his steps in advance. Additionally, the main important thing he is regularly told not to give up even if in the case of losing the competition. These soft skills are much more valued in real -life than any other skills.
To conclude,competitive sports should have place in the school curriculum. They could help the education system prepare competitive learners for the future by teaching them important soft skills,such as working collaboratively in a team and hold a motivation,which are necessary for them in real-life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 5.60731707317 446% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 965.302439024 193% => OK
No of words: 339.0 196.424390244 173% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49262536873 4.92477711251 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.95043957031 2.65546596893 149% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 106.607317073 175% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551622418879 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 283.868780488 207% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.8700679467 43.030603864 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.133333333 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 5.23603664747 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 1.69756097561 1355% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180158121305 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736951132114 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552332392312 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131041657636 0.15604864568 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371097639109 0.0819641961636 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 61.2550243902 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.3012195122 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 11.4140731707 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 40.7170731707 194% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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