The table below shows how young people in Tokyo Japan listened to music over the previous month The pie chart shows a record company s international findings about whether people preferred live or recored music Summarise the information by selecting and r

The given table illustrates how adolescents in Tokyo, Japan listened to music over the last month. The pie chart, however, reveals a record company’s worldwide surveys about whether people sympathize with live or recorded compositions.
It can be seen that a hefty 79% of males listened to music by MP3 players, followed by live music(55%) and Internet(55%). However, only 19% of males respondents used CDs. For females, to compare, live music was the most preferable way of listening to music with a percentage of 44%. The MP3 players also had a massive fan-base around the female listeners, but its figures for them are almost twice as less than males’(40%). The data was followed by the Internet(42%) and the most preferential source, live music which took the percentage of 44%. The same as male’s choice, CDs were the least liked among women with the proportion of 22%.
Overall, while men tended to use MP3 - players to listen to music, women preferred the live one. Also, whereas the vast majority of people(70%) would love to listen to live music and just above a quarter to record, another minor proportion does not know exactly.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 539, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...music which took the percentage of 44%. The same as male’s choice, CDs were the lea...
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Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...minor proportion does not know exactly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 945.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94764397906 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65863353027 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664921465969 0.547539520022 121% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.2913882772 43.030603864 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.0 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.23603664747 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292765531539 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122513255562 0.103423049105 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943652799569 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232039230758 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135766480121 0.0819641961636 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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