The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the percentage of the worldwide market share of different notebook computer manufacture in the year 2006 and 2007.

Overall, the table give the information of the company HP having the highest market share in the two year and the company Fujitsu-Siemens is vice versa. According to the information from the table some companies having hike in there market share in 2007 compare to 2006 and some companies are opposite.

To begin with the companies HP and Dell have around same percent of hike in 2007 compare to the 2006. In HP they got 2.6 percent and Dell got 3.6 percent of hike. The manufacture Acer having decrease in the world wide market share in 2007 compare to 2006.

In addition , Toshiba have 1.1% of increase in share and Lenovo have 0.4% decrease in share market in the year 2007. Fujitsu-Siemen having 2.5% increase in the business in the year 2007 and the other companies in the year 2006 they have 22.8% share and in the end of 2007 they got 3.5% of increase in the world wide share market.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 849.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66483516484 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45923496296 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 72.0 106.607317073 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.395604395604 0.547539520022 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3063217094 43.030603864 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.125 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.23603664747 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312411820841 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186230322355 0.103423049105 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13917437748 0.0843802449381 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260286415961 0.15604864568 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145463386764 0.0819641961636 177% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.64 8.06136585366 82% => OK
difficult_words: 22.0 40.7170731707 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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