The two pie charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The pie charts show the four retail sectors in Canada in terms of the percentage of their internet sales in two-year 2005 and 2010. As an overview, the most popular online shopping sales was electronic appliances.

It is clear from the chart that, in 2005, the percentage of online food and beverages was about 22% which increased by 10% in the 2010. However, the percentage for internet sales of video games also went up by 5% from the 2005 figure of 18%.

In contrast, the percentage of the online sales of the other sectors decreased. The most dramatic fall was in the home furnishings retail sectors. While, the figure was 25% of the total online sales of these four sectors in 2005, it fell to just 15% in 2010. Further, there was also a decline in the electronics and appliances sectors which showed a decline from 35% in 2005 to 30% in 2010.

To sum up, figure for food and beverages as well as video games increased. Whereas, other sectors observed with decrease in the given time period.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
This essay topic by users
Post date Users Rates Link to Content
2020-01-22 dolzoo 67 view
2020-01-02 Rashila 78 view
2020-01-02 Rashila 60 view
2019-12-21 Jass Rai 84 view
2019-12-17 thanhthanh211 61 view
Essays by user Komalsandhu :

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rages as well as video games increased. Whereas, other sectors observed with decrease i...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, well, whereas, while, in contrast, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 828.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65168539326 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41395283443 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505617977528 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 241.2 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9661317874 43.030603864 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.23603664747 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434557625345 0.215688989381 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161604218873 0.103423049105 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127402345021 0.0843802449381 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260755835659 0.15604864568 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16236584021 0.0819641961636 198% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.2329268293 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.