The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts illustrates the percentage of the internet shopping sales in 4 retail sectors in 2005 and 2010 in Canada.

Overall, there were an increase in the online sales in food & beverage sector and video games sector from 2005 to 2010. Whereas, home furnishings and electronics & appliance saw a decrease in the internet sales over the observed period.

In 2005, video games accounted for 18% of their online shopping sales, which was slightly lower than that of food & beverage with 22%. over the period of 5 year, the online sales for food and beverage sector increased by 10%, which was double those for video games wih 5%.

The internet shopping sales for home furnishing decreased from 25% in 2005 to 15% in 2010. there was the same trend in the proportion of those for electronics & appliance sector. It accounted for the largest proportion in 2005 with 35% then dropped to 30% in 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 774.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02597402597 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47888050982 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525974025974 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 213.3 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.5831560276 43.030603864 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.75 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.625 5.23603664747 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281455188385 0.215688989381 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146891060325 0.103423049105 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979196753025 0.0843802449381 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21395502731 0.15604864568 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945718941808 0.0819641961636 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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