You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university.
Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter:
explain which course you are interested in
say what you know about the university
explain why you should receive the scholarship
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing in application for a full tuition scholarship during my four-year course in International Relations by Underwood International College.
I believe getting my bachelor degree at UIC would be a wise decision as it provides small class size and interactive classroom setting, which can develop my academic learning effectively. As far as I am concerned about Residential College – Sinchon Campus, it would be great to study with friends coming from all over the world and widen my knowledge about global issues. Furthermore, becoming a UIC student means having a chance to spend a year in any of over 620 institutions in 59 countries, through Yonsei’s extensive exchange program. I would be grateful to be a member of UIC’s house one day.
I hope to be offered admissions scholarship because my family income is not enough to pay regular fees. I have made an effort for three years in high school and been highly appreciated by my English teacher. In addition, I am a fan of Kpop and I have always wanted to discover Korean as my second foreign language.
I look forward to your reply as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2019-02-17 | Hally Nguyen | 11 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 104, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...come is not enough to pay regular fees. I have made an effort for three years in ...
^
Line 6, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as soon as possible. Yours faithfully,
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, look, second, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 5.60731707317 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 975.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 196.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97448979592 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04182201559 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.704081632653 0.547539520022 129% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3288757957 43.030603864 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.333333333 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0780478937277 0.215688989381 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0314193666469 0.103423049105 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0212487345598 0.0843802449381 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0424673869587 0.15604864568 27% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0117319327157 0.0819641961636 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.