You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make c

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The provided table presents information about the market share of notebook computer in the world for manufacturers over a period of 1 year.

According to the given data the presence of a particular company has increased significantly between 2016 and 2017 while the others has suffered a big amount of loss in profits.

it is worth noting that, in the first quarter of the period the income of the company A was around only a few billions whereas near the end of the year it started following an upward trend. this resulted in an upsurge of 7 billions dollars in profit and made the manufacturer the leading one in the industry. Consequently, it can be clearly seen that other companies have not improved as much in the process and yet even experienced a fall in their productivity. In total, this market sector has grown significantly over the one year period and have reached a point where its value is more than 100 billions of US dollars.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... a big amount of loss in profits. it is worth noting that, in the first quar...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...r it started following an upward trend. this resulted in an upsurge of 7 billions do...
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Line 9, column 597, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '100 billion'.
Suggestion: 100 billion
...ed a point where its value is more than 100 billions of US dollars.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74096385542 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77551374647 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644578313253 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 23.3838738355 43.030603864 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 131.166666667 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.23603664747 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157061187833 0.215688989381 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840472604113 0.103423049105 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121346026258 0.0843802449381 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139256876569 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149765552116 0.0819641961636 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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