Describe an educational goal and explain what you need to do to achieve it
A successful businessman has always been my passion since I was a small kid. I have always been in an effort to one day being a successful businessman. However, it is not easy. It requires a spirit that never quits. I am sure I will achieve my goal. In my writing, I will share three most important things that I do every day to attain this passion.
First of all, I must improve my knowledge of business and economy. It cannot be denied that they are essential bases of my career in the future.Therefore, I decided to gain admission to Foreign Trade University. At present, I am a freshman studying International Business Management of this university. Besides, I sometimes improve my knowledge from the Internet such as online courses, business newspaper, etc.
Secondly, English is an effective factor that contributes to my success. Nowadays, English is one of most popular languages over the world. It will be my weakness if I do not improve it. I learn English by many different ways, from my teachers in my university, my friend, my mobile phone,etc. My favourite English courses are British Council and BBC Learning English. Every day, I always improve my English by listening audio, conversations or reading articles, essays from these courses. In addition, I have a plan that I will get an Ielts certificate when I am a second- year student.
Last but not least, it is necessary to expand my relationship with successful people. I can learn many things from these people. They can be experiences, lessons, tips and the way to organise a company. Moreover, successful people are probably my mentors, investors for my career in the future.
There are three most important that I do every day to achieve my educational goal. It is the fact that anyone has a dream but to attain it, only someone can. So, I have to make an effort more and more to one day being a successful businessman.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore
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... the world. It will be my weakness if I dont improve it. I learn English by many dif...
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...f I dont improve it. I learn English by many different ways, from my teachers in my university...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , etc
...y university, my friend, my mobile phone,etc. My favourite English courses are Briti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.48453608247 227% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 32.9175257732 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 937.175257732 168% => OK
No of words: 328.0 206.0 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80182926829 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 3.78020617076 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9461616985 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 127.690721649 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530487804878 0.622605031667 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 290.88556701 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.13402061856 241% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 12.6804123711 189% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7065162311 44.8134815571 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.625 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6666666667 16.8248392259 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 4.34317383033 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 7.41237113402 229% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0724391417864 0.216113520407 34% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0271642629838 0.0766984524023 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581774856743 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0557555389524 0.12726935374 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633283102815 0.0580467560999 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 70.7449484536 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 41.2886597938 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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