Essay topics: You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager:– What the problem is– How you feel about the problem– What steps you want the manager to take

Essay topics:

Essay topics: You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager:

– What the problem is

– How you feel about the problem

– What steps you want the manager to take

I am writing to express my concern in regards to the hygiene issues I am facing in your sports club changing room.

I am a premium member at the York sports facility since 2016, but I have never encountered any issues with the changing room until a week ago, it has been quite a mess lately. Firstly, the towels provided are soiled and even damp: secondly, one out of the three restrooms are not functional since two weeks, resulting in long waiting queues and lastly, there is a foul smell every other day due to improper disposal of the trash can.

After every match, it is becoming challenging to use the changing room as the queue keeps getting longer, especially for using the restrooms.

On Wednesday, last week, I informed the warden, who is in charge for the up-keep of rooms about the increasing problems that are faced by members of the facility, but unfortunately, no action was taken. It will be helpful if the restroom is fixed soon, as it would save a lot on time: also the towels should be clean and dry, and the trash should be disposed of every day without fail. If these issues continue to persist, then I will be forced to cancel my membership

I will look forward to your reply.

Kind Regards

Ann

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
I am writing to express my concern in regards to the hygiene issues I am facing in your ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng in your sports club changing room. I am a premium member at the York sports...
^^^^
Line 7, column 47, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...every match, it is becoming challenging to use the changing room as the queue keeps ge...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ill be forced to cancel my membership I will look forward to your reply. ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1021.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61990950226 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42273784971 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 127.690721649 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651583710407 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 305.1 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 16.3608247423 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.4398223959 44.8134815571 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.625 76.5299724578 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.625 16.8248392259 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 4.34317383033 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0768069858389 0.216113520407 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0321811840315 0.0766984524023 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341525264102 0.0603063233224 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0400578274432 0.12726935374 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258675856132 0.0580467560999 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 8.37731958763 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 8.62886597938 203% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 8.54432989691 150% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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