It is argued that children should be motivated to join any interested free time work.I agree with the above statement which will be beneficial for pupils in career.
On the one hand, part time job can be very helpful for children to boost their skill in any particular field even though they are pursuing their education.It will be the best way to use leisure time wisely and get experience before the graduation.For instance,a survey conducted in an university of Regina showed that 75% higher level students are engaged in part time work and also getting good salaries.This work experience helped them in career growth and now they are working in the reputed international companies.Furthermore,they are also awarded for the best employee of the year.
On the other hand, indulging into work for a short time for money might not be a best option for students, however, they could utilize that precious time for learning some extra-curriculum activities which is related to colleges or universities.Children can take part in sports activities to increase their knowledge which will keep them healthy.Take an example, Oxford University students used their spare time in dancing classes ,the result recorded that the children who took classes have higher fitness level than others.Additionally,Utilizing time in other task besides studying courses might divert pupils mind and they may get lowest score in the tests.Such type of work may increase their stress and donot provide any essential support to achieve high percentage in the examination.
In my view,I believe that excess time can be used by many ways it depends on students career.It has both pros and cons,I think doing part-time job will be fruitful in future development rather than wasting valuable time on playing or recreational works.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, may, so, for instance, i think, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 4.92783505155 264% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.03092783505 297% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 937.175257732 162% => OK
No of words: 289.0 206.0 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2491349481 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3430333436 2.54303337028 131% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 127.690721649 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602076124567 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 290.88556701 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 12.6804123711 32% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 72.0 16.3608247423 440% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 252.277005492 44.8134815571 563% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 379.25 76.5299724578 496% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 72.25 16.8248392259 429% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.5 4.34317383033 564% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 2.54639175258 864% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289480336694 0.216113520407 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179715941232 0.0766984524023 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349660780047 0.0603063233224 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179715941232 0.12726935374 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349660780047 0.0580467560999 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.4 8.37731958763 470% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -1.6 70.7449484536 -2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 3.82989690722 381% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 7.45979381443 421% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.35 8.71597938144 165% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.41 7.59969072165 150% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 41.2886597938 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 8.62886597938 342% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.8 8.54432989691 360% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 8.15463917526 380% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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