One of the most challenge problems in modern society is to have the most up-to-date skills for workplace. For solving this, government decides to give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to learn new skills. Do you think it is an effective way for government to spend its money?
When it comes to governments, there are a lot of projects or plans requiring funds support. therefore, supporting adults over 25 years to take training courses could be an option. In my opinion, I do not agree with this statement. I do not think it is an effective way to spend money. The reasons for my taking this position are as follow.
To begin with, offering training courses for adults to learn new skills for their careers is not government’s obligation. In the other words, adults should take their own responsibility to catch up new skills to adapt the fast world changing. For example, my friend, John, he is a software engineer at the leading technology company in taiwan. For this position, he has to build up and maintain websites for their customers. However, it is not quite simple for him. In this modern society, there are a lot of hacking techniques advancing every day. he has to follow up the new types of attacking skills to ensure his customers’ data safe and not leaking. this is just one type of jobs. there are a lot of different jobs in the world. therefore, it is impossible for governments to offer several types of courses for different jobs.
Furthermore, necessity of courses for all adults over 25 years to learn new skills is unclear. To be more specific, some people may lack the motivation to catch up new techniques because they do not need it. they are able to keep jobs or survive without following up the advanced skills. The fundamental education could be a good example. In taiwan, there are a lot of children in remote areas. they may not have chance to learn new knowledge or study. As we know, they are not knowledgeable to survive in the future without any fundamental studies. Compared with spending money on adults over 25 years who have abilities to gain knowledge and make money, it is more urged for children to get more educational resources. Thus, I think governments allocates funds to training courses for adults is ineffective.
To sum up, governments should evaluate the necessity of training courses for adults and avoid exceeding their obligation. In other words, adults over 25 years means they can survive and raise themselves up. therefore, the supporting the training courses for them is ineffective way to spend money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, i think, of course, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 7.48453608247 267% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 26.3917525773 220% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 937.175257732 206% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 393.0 206.0 191% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91857506361 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 3.78020617076 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8177166223 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 127.690721649 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483460559796 0.622605031667 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 290.88556701 203% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 1.44329896907 554% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 12.6804123711 213% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0746258725 44.8134815571 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.5925925926 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5555555556 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 4.34317383033 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.94845360825 304% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383197082082 0.216113520407 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104402151377 0.0766984524023 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806029038112 0.0603063233224 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240183596474 0.12726935374 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186916723201 0.0580467560999 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 41.2886597938 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.