Writing task 1 (a letter)Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details:– Why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?– Ask your friend

Dear Jan,

Hope you are doing good, I am writing you to seek your help to collect money for an orphanage who take care for 80 children.
Let me explain you the reason for this cause, Last week, I had visited a child orphanage which is situated in Amritsar, there I have seen some HIV infected children and that house does not have any fixed income source, the person who run this charity requested for some financial help so that he can continue the education of the children.

I have donated 20000 rupess to them, but to be honest I don't feel this is sufficient money to support the noble cause. So that I want your support on this.

As you are proactive member of many social charitable groups and have big contact list. I would be nice if you circulate this matter with in your circle, so that we can gather some handsome amount.

Hope you will give me positive response. I have attached the pamphlet of the group you can directly contact with them in case you want more information .

Your Truly,
Satpreet Singh

Votes
Average: 8.7 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 57, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...0000 rupess to them, but to be honest I dont feel this is sufficient money to suppor...
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Line 6, column 120, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cient money to support the noble cause. So that I want your support on this. As you...
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Line 8, column 75, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'contacted'.
Suggestion: contacted
...y social charitable groups and have big contact list. I would be nice if you circulate ...
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Line 10, column 152, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h them in case you want more information . Your Truly, Satpreet Singh
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Line 13, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rmation . Your Truly, Satpreet Singh
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 851.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5752688172 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25502384599 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655913978495 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.8244210664 44.8134815571 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5555555556 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.22222222222 4.34317383033 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188624497693 0.216113520407 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733421642347 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790472105103 0.0603063233224 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111010742911 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979346085963 0.0580467560999 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 8.62886597938 197% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.