Dear Sir,
I am writing to apply for a job that was advertised in a site related to assisting children in summer holiday on 12th may. I was just browsing on the net when I faced with that. As I am into children and holidays, I look forward to work with your company.
To tell the truth, I have been working with children especially guys between 7 to 12. I really enjoy from being with children and helping them in doing their work. I am really eager to do something about their food and drink. I can make food on holiday and provide suitable drinks for children. For having an interview, I am available on sunday and tuesday evenings. If they do not seem an appropriate times, so, I can make my time according to your demand.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
FATEMEH BAGHERI
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing to apply for a job that wa...
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Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Sir, I am writing to apply for a job that was advertised in a site related to...
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Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...o something about their food and drink. I can make food on holiday and provide su...
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Line 5, column 403, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'time'?
Suggestion: time
...ngs. If they do not seem an appropriate times, so, I can make my time according to yo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, really, so, to tell the truth
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 670.0 937.175257732 71% => OK
No of words: 149.0 206.0 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4966442953 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49378814695 3.78020617076 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47731930541 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 127.690721649 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644295302013 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 199.8 290.88556701 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.213364833 44.8134815571 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.9090909091 76.5299724578 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5454545455 16.8248392259 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15224752235 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546209782398 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458201852888 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104444233623 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00354075599326 0.0580467560999 6% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 8.37731958763 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 70.7449484536 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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