You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,- give details of your study plans- explain why

Dear Igor,

I hope the letter find you in the best of health. I am writing to you to enquire if I could ask you for a favour. Allow me to elaborate.

I would like to exhibit my gratitude for all the help I received for my admission to UC Berkley. I feel elated to inform that I will be starting classes from fall, 2018. I have been accepted to BA (English). I feel over the moon.

As you know, my father had recently passed away and now only my mother is bread earner in the family. As such, I cannot put her under financial burden. As such, I have decided that I will indulge myself into work to earn some extra money to support myself.

Furthermore, I am aware that it will be a daunting task to find a part time job with the schedule of my class. But, I am hopeful that with your connections you can land me a job somewhere to ease the plight of my mother. I hope you will help me out in the best possible manner.

Expecting a prompt and a positive reply.

Yours sincerely
Brad Jason

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ll be starting classes from fall, 2018. I have been accepted to BA English. I fee...
^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...18. I have been accepted to BA English. I feel over the moon. As you know, my...
^
Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... cannot put her under financial burden. As such, I have decided that I will indulg...
^^
Line 9, column 67, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...at it will be a daunting task to find a part time job with the schedule of my class. But,...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, i feel, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 813.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.19072164948 4.54256449028 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31153815241 2.54303337028 91% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613402061856 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4999823633 44.8134815571 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 54.2 76.5299724578 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9333333333 16.8248392259 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235770561774 0.216113520407 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684462680324 0.0766984524023 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753668673547 0.0603063233224 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110541088373 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0976515918863 0.0580467560999 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.8 8.37731958763 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 70.7449484536 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 7.45979381443 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.13 8.71597938144 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 8.62886597938 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 5.0 8.15463917526 61% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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